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Elec P. Carpenter:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BdP3scqtracTHW85cmVj9p6K0WBQC11WYgLta1RQcDo/edit?usp=sharing

Text paste replaced with link to Google Doc. It'll grow as I add to the story.

Evie:
Glad to see you (and Sir Albin) back!  I'm looking forward to reading more of this story.   :)

NavaWazr:
Really like the story because it's set outside Gwynedd and because I like Albin. I am curious about the Nosairi so hope you will include more about them in later chapters. I wonder who the shadowy Deryni from the cold north would be. I like that you've set up the, as yet unnamed, assassin character. I wonder when Albin will realize the thievery is really attempts on his own life. I wonder when Albin will realize this is a challenge. The twist of the Nosairi taking the information from Conall... I wonder when we will results from the Conall reading arise in this story. Meanwhile, how does Albin feel about his father?

In summary, I like it. Thank you for writing, and please post more when you can.

Elec P. Carpenter:

--- Quote from: NavaWazr on November 02, 2014, 03:56:53 pm ---Really like the story because it's set outside Gwynedd and because I like Albin. I am curious about the Nosairi so hope you will include more about them in later chapters. I wonder who the shadowy Deryni from the cold north would be. I like that you've set up the, as yet unnamed, assassin character. I wonder when Albin will realize the thievery is really attempts on his own life. I wonder when Albin will realize this is a challenge. The twist of the Nosairi taking the information from Conall... I wonder when we will results from the Conall reading arise in this story. Meanwhile, how does Albin feel about his father?

In summary, I like it. Thank you for writing, and please post more when you can.

--- End quote ---

Thanks!

You've raised many of the very reasons I felt compelled to write about Albin. I saw in the little boy a future man who had choices to make and a patrimony that he needed to live down rather than inherit. I also naturally figured that once Nigel accepted his grandchildren they would be raised with the family, and with that would inevitably come knightly and esoteric training. In KKB we saw that Kelson intended, starting with Araxie, to empower Haldane family members so that there would be greater power shared among the family, probably as much as a guard against future jealousies such as Conall's as it was a need to increase the family power base for the defense of the realm. I simply dealt Albin in on that.

The Nosairi are not an invention- The Assassins were of the Nizari Ismaili sect of Islam, and were the sometimes adversaries of the Crusaders and the Knightly orders of the Church during the lifetime of the Latin Kingdom of Jerusalem. I just changed the name a bit. That change and the addition of the Deryni among them plus the storyline I applied to them is the only fiction there- They were real.

As for Albin's feelings on Conall... Stay tuned!

Evie:
Hey, Elec, to help latecomers find all the pieces of your story without having to go hunting through the Deryni Fanfic folder for them (especially as any new comments will instantly pop an older chapter to the very top of the folder), could you link them together?  Here is the link for your opening "teaser" chapter that you posted a few months ago:  http://www.rhemuthcastle.com/index.php/topic,1206.0.html   At minimum, it helps readers if you add a link to the next chapter at the bottom of the previous chapter, but for those who need to backtrack and find the beginning of a story, it helps if there is also a link at the top of chapters linking back to the one before it.  DesertRose has started an story database that makes it easier for readers to get to a particular chapter of a story, but the latest stories haven't been added to that sheet yet, so until she gets around to it (or delegates the task to someone else with edit permissions on that file), the in-story links help a lot.

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